These days people are using the Internet for shopping, work and to communicate with others without the need for face to face meetings. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

The emergence of the
internet
in the world's civilization has resulted
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convenient ways of doing business and
communication
.No doubt the
internet
is one of the magnificent innovations that mankind has managed to come up with regardless of its demerits in certain areas of operation.
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,traditional ways of managing and doing business had hindrances
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working environments where wastage of time and resources was evident.
Communication
between business partners and consumers had to be done manually and individuals had to meet in person.
This
made governments and the private sector
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come up with sufficient methods of
communication
. Categorically, the
internet
has made shopping easy with the emergence of e-commerce platforms.E-commerce is an online platform that enables users(buyers) to purchase goods and services in remote areas with an intention of being delivered at the locations of their own convenience.Goods and services are delivered to the doorsteps minimising time wastage and a checkout system is availed for payments before or after delivery.
Further
than
this
, the
internet
has facilitated effective
communication
processes in the majority of workplaces.Nowadays,nearly all businesses and
government
institutions
have incorporated all departments on online service provisions.
This
has materialized in workers giving services effectively and in many
government
institutions
enabled transparency.Employees are able to communicate formally and achieve the set goals and objectives of the companies and
government
institutions
. In conclusion, the
internet
has changed the mode of operations in many formal and informal sectors of the economy in the whole world.Contrary to
this
, the
internet
has its own discrepancies where governments and businesses are facing cyber security threats.Fraudulent and illegal activities have increased parallel to the robust
internet
usage in nearly all private sector and
government
institutions
.It is
therefore
recommended that more public awareness programmes should be committed to
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members of the public on the merits and demerits of the
internet
.
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