The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph displays the global
usage
of water
by 3 sectors over the century and the table examines water
consumption in Brazil
and COngo
in 2000.
Overall
, while
the usage
of water
for agricultural purposes increased enormously, the usage
for other remained purposes did not see such
an enormous increase. Despite this
, Brazil
consumed more water
resources than Congo
.
Back to details, in 1900 usage
of water
for agriculture sake was around 500 km
which continues going up. Already in 1950
it reached 1000 Add a comma
,1950
km
, over the next 50 years by 2000 it tripled compared to usage
in 1950. Meanwhile
the scale of a rise for the Add a comma
,Meanwhile
usage
of industrial and domestic usage
was quite lower with just above 1000 and around 300 km
by 2000 respectively.
Populations in Brazil
and Congo
were 176 and 5.2 million respectively. The area of irrigated land was 26 higher in Brazil
accounting for 26,500 km
than 100 km
in Congo
. While
Brazilians consumed 359 m each, citizens of Congo
only consumed 8 m each.Submitted by prostoy.pacan4ek on
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