The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph displays the global
usage
of
water
by 3 sectors over the century and the table examines
water
consumption in
Brazil
and
COngo
in 2000.
Overall
,
while
the
usage
of
water
for agricultural purposes increased enormously, the
usage
for other remained purposes did not see
such
an enormous increase. Despite
this
,
Brazil
consumed more
water
resources than
Congo
. Back to details, in 1900
usage
of
water
for agriculture sake was around 500
km
which continues going up. Already in
1950
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it reached 1000
km
, over the next 50 years by 2000 it tripled compared to
usage
in 1950.
Meanwhile
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the scale of a rise for the
usage
of industrial and domestic
usage
was quite lower with just above 1000 and around 300
km
by 2000 respectively. Populations in
Brazil
and
Congo
were 176 and 5.2 million respectively. The area of irrigated land was 26 higher in
Brazil
accounting for 26,500
km
than 100
km
in
Congo
.
While
Brazilians consumed 359 m each, citizens of
Congo
only consumed 8 m each.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, water, brazil, congo, km with synonyms.
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