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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph displays the global
usage
 of
water
 by 3 sectors over the century and the table examines
water
 consumption in
Brazil
 and
COngo
 in 2000.
Overall
,
while
 the
usage
 of
water
 for agricultural purposes increased enormously, the
usage
 for other remained purposes did not see
such
 an enormous increase. Despite
this
,
Brazil
 consumed more
water
 resources than
Congo
. Back to details, in 1900
usage
 of
water
 for agriculture sake was around 500
km
 which continues going up. Already in
1950
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 it reached 1000
km
, over the next 50 years by 2000 it tripled compared to
usage
 in 1950.
Meanwhile
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 the scale of a rise for the
usage
 of industrial and domestic
usage
 was quite lower with just above 1000 and around 300
km
 by 2000 respectively. Populations in
Brazil
 and
Congo
 were 176 and 5.2 million respectively. The area of irrigated land was 26 higher in
Brazil
 accounting for 26,500
km
 than 100
km
 in
Congo
.
While
 Brazilians consumed 359 m each, citizens of
Congo
 only consumed 8 m each.
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