Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them do you agree or disagree?

The phenomenon of many criminals violating the law again after they are released has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
this
issue in question may be, I totally agree that giving them a schooling opportunity would bring us more benefits than sending them to prison. Of all the reasons why giving them an
education
are better than only taking their freedom, probably the most significant one is that providing
education
and professional
skills
training for prisoners in order to make them can find a job after their sentences would prevent them break the law again.
For instance
, many people never receive an
education
because they grew up in a harsh environment. They
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not the proper
skills
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in the
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the knowledge and
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reason that should not be overlooked is that knowledge would change their personal philosophy for the purpose of reducing second crime.
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,
education
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their horizon and give them a purpose
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a doctor or
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should be able to lend them realize that
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a good judgement and
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their new dreams. Under
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criminals to receive
education
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training can give them a goal and
skills
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again. So, I completely agree with
this
idea.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rehabilitation
  • Recidivism
  • Reintegration
  • Vocational training
  • Incarceration
  • Deterrent
  • Correctional facilities
  • Reformative justice
  • Social reentry
  • Ex-offender
  • Criminal justice system
  • Restorative practices
  • Penal system
  • Social marginalization
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