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Life is better now than 100 years ago. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the contemporary epoch,it is a moot point that life is better now than 100
years
 ago. A significant chunk of society defies the notion,
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 the other ideology welcomes the same.
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years
 ago. There
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myriad
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reasons
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 in favour of my argument. The most prominent one is communication technology has evolved over a period, now a person can communicate with a person from anywhere through many channels like mobile phones and email. Earlier people use to send letters via a bird which use to take a long time to exchange, now people upgrade to various means of communication. Apart from it, travelling is way more easier and comfortable. Before the eras of aeroplanes and training people use to travel via bullock cart which was pulled by bulls and it used to take many days to reach a destination. With ,development the mean of transportation has
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 developed now human can travel anywhere in the world. Train and aeroplanes can take them anywhere within a few hours no matter how long are distance. To add a few more reasons, how can forget about the health care system, 100
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 ago health care was not developed as compared to now. To substantiate, healthcare has advanced technology for delivering neonates. In the past babies were delivered to the home with the help of a maid or grandmother and in most
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 mothers lost their lives. To encapsulate, I am of the opinion that life has become more easier and comfortable as compared to 100
years
 ago. Every sector has evolved over time and there are not any plausible arguments against the phenomenon.
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