The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The production of instant noodles is illustrated in the graphic.
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, manufacturing is a man-made process comprising 8 main stages, which results in the noodle being labelled and sealed ready for transport to the market. The process begins with flour being stored in the storage silosLinking Words
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and ends with the noodle cup being sealed tight.
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