The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The production of instant noodles is illustrated in the graphic.
Overall
, manufacturing is a man-made process comprising 8 main stages, which results in the noodle being labelled and sealed ready for transport to the market. The process begins with flour being stored in the storage silos
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and ends with the noodle cup being sealed tight.
To begin
, the flour is transported from a truck
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and is
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stored in storage silos, in which it is proceeded to the addition of water and oil in a mixer,
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the
dough
. The
dough
is
then
placed on the rollers producing
dough
sheets, which go through a slicing machine leaving thin
dough
strips.
Then
, the
dough
is transformed into noodle discs, and is cooked, dry with supplementary vegetables and spiced. It is
then
placed in cups and is
finally
labelled and sealed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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