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Some think newspapers are the best method for reading the news while others think other media is better. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#think #newspapers #method #news #media
Recently in the
world
,
information
 technology has improved and developed quickly. Computers are a part of digital
included
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 data and
internet
information
, there is a lot of
information
that is
 created and updated about everything and everywhere around the
world
 continuously. So currently some
people
 like reading
newspapers
 and some
people
 prefer to read or listen through websites or youtube. As the
internet
 grows strongly,
people
 tend to read or listen to
news
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the news
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by
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media
 more than
newspapers
. especially young
people
,
they
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who
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 tend to update
information
 quickly everywhere and
everytime
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. Because they have a laptop or desktop computer
of
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themself and they dislike buying
newspapers
 at bookstores.
this
 leads to reduce the
amount
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 of
newspapers
 in markets. they think that they may help to improve and protect the environment all over the
world
.
Beside
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this
, there are some adults who have
their
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 habit of reading news
throughout
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in
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newspapers
 in the morning as a part of relaxation at coffee shops. all of them do not use computers or smartphones and the rest of them do not have
internet
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 at home. they do not seem to believe news on the
internet
 reliability as they read in
newspapers
 and they think that they support
to keep
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keeping
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 tradition in their country and help to create jobs for poor
people
 who did not get high education, they have only
earn
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 money by buy the
newspapers
 along
street
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. In my opinion,
people
 reading
information
 through the
media
 or newspaper is good. But I still prefer to read
internet
information
 via
media
 on computers or smartphones. It brings convenience everywhere,
everytime
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 you want and
save
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 more time a day. Now the environment is so bad in the
world
 because of destroying forests. So I think we should help improve and build up a new atmosphere in your country by
update
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 more
information
 from
internet
media
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Credibility
  • Editorial oversight
  • Investigative journalism
  • Digital divide
  • News cycle
  • Sensationalism
  • Media literacy
  • Filter bubble
  • Echo chamber
  • Citizen journalism
  • Paywall
  • Fake news
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