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Culture and education both play an important role with many countries, some say that preservation of culture has its features while others think that instead of culture people should focus on education in the country. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give examples and reasons to support your claims.

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Cultural values and
education
 both play imperative roles in a multitude of nations; some say that
culture
 should be focused on,
whereas
 others surmise that it is
education
that is
 better highlighted.
This
 essay will focus a spotlight on both given discernment,
as well as
 their alternatives in the ensuing paragraphs. Looking at the side of emphasizing
culture
first,
a meritorious aspect is, it could bolster the national identity of a nation. As much as anything, when
people
 are versed in their cultural values and tradition, it becomes a representation of themselves.
Conversely
, when nations bring to the fore
education
, there might be a significant lack of funding;
in other words
, the financial allocation can better be splurged on the essential needs of the
people
 like food and shelter. On the antipodal view, when countries ameliorate
education
 more,
this
 action may generate strong future professionals.
In other words
, they can become pillars of the economy
due to
 their contributions. Alternatively, when nations focus too much on
culture
,
people
 may become idealistic and there might be no progress which in turn may generate conflicts and stagnation in a country. As far as I am concerned, I side with the idea of giving prominence to
education
; in a
sense
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people
 may amass knowledge and the said can abet the workers to become more productive, not just for themselves but for the country as well. As an inference,
this
 essay has presented both sides of the idea
along with
 my support for giving emphasis to
education
.
At the end
 of the day,
culture
 can transform the values of a person,
while
education
 can change a person's views with progress.
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