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Many countries use fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) as the main source of energy. However, in some countries the use of the alternative sources of energy (wind energy and solar energy) is encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this development?

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Fossil
fuels
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 have been the major source of
energy
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 around the world since the industrialization era in 1800.
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, wind and solar
energy
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 are being adopted in some countries. I agree with the statement
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 the fact that fossil
fuels
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 are the major culprits in
greenhouses
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 gas.
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, recent studies have shown that fossil
fuels
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 are the major producers of carbon dioxide emissions, these gases
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 cause what is known as greenhouse effects, which are causing the atmosphere to retain heat and get warmer causing global warming. Looking for alternative sources of
energy
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 could be helpful in keeping our planet earth healthy.
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,
energy
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 sources
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 as wind, and solar are naturally occurring and cheap to harness, they do not cause any harm to the environment as they do not release any harmful by-products. Exploring these options could enable us to achieve the mitigation measures that were put in place to curb global warming. In conclusion, clean sources of
energy
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 should replace fossil
fuels
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 as the main source of
energy
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 as they have been proven to be environmentally friendly and Safe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable resources
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gases
  • energy independence
  • climate change
  • environmental impact
  • infrastructural development
  • technological innovation
  • economic disruption
  • fossil fuel depletion
  • energy transition
  • consistency and reliability
  • wildlife habitat
  • natural landscapes
  • solar panels
  • wind turbines
  • energy consumption
  • ecological balance
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