The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table show the salaries of the anthrolopologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table show the salaries of the anthrolopologists in work after five years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie chart illustrates
occupations
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the occupations
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of Anthropology graduates
whereas
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the given table compares five
years
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advance
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salaries of them from one particular university. It can be noticeable that
the
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apply
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most of the
bachelor
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bachelor's
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degree holders are working for a full-time job
while
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the highest profitable positions
occopuied
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occupied
on
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in
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government
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the government
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sector after
a
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apply
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five years of
a
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apply
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period from graduation.
According to
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the pie chart, the majority of university
pupil
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pupils
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selected a
carreer
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career
as a 9 to 5 worker
by
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apply
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just under
of
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a
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apply
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half.
Part time
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working and postgraduation studying
have
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choosen
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chosen
by the least
of
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apply
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the
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proportion, with
mere
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a mere
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5%.
Part time
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work accounted for 15 % of the career perspective of graduates,
while
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full-time
post graduation
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post-graduation
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study and unknown data showed
same
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the same
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data by 8% of bachelors. When it comes to
the
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pay, freelance consultants and government officers almost have
same
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the same
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distribution of salary range with
only
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the only
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exception
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the exception
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that half of
public
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the public
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sector workers are paid above 100.000 USD,
while
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a third earns between 75.000 and 99.999 USD.
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This
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ranges have
same
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the same
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proportion of workers
on
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in
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the freelance consultancy field.
On the other hand
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, private companies have relatively balanced earnings, between 50.000 and 74.999 band area are most commonly
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being given to their employees.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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