The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table show the salaries of the anthrolopologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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salaries of them from one particular university.
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bachelor
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in
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period from graduation.
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the
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Part time
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data by 8% of bachelors.
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