Essay topic: In many countries, crimes rates amongst younger people has been rising. Discuss the causes and solutions for this problem.

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,which can be more expensive than owning one.
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while
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,assuming that the cost of the
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,
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the
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this
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since it is more save to own your
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,so it is not practical to change your
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will be
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to the sons of the owner ,
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however
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to rent a house or flat than
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it , but
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the long
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it will be more expensive.
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to rent
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although
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buying
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it is better . since it will go to the children of the owner so that they live a decent
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.
additionally
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the long
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renting.
also
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some people.
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