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Some people today believe that the world’s increase in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis. Other people believe that world population increase is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world’s economy and society.

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The population has been increasing for years. Some
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 believe that it can cause damage to the environment
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 other
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 think that it could benefit
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our society. From my personal perspective, I think the population can be harmful to our planet. Nowadays, lifespan is longer than before when you compare it to the data of decades. Thanks to medical development, elderly
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 can easily live up to 90 years old. More and more
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 live on the earth, which means
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 are rapidly used by those
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.
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, in 1950, there were only 1,500
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 living in Taiwan, but now, there are more than 2,300 million
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 living in Taiwan.
People
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 take things for granted since many items are produced automatically.
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, we should consider the main idea of
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 are limited, and one day, they will disappear. It can be a huge loss and lead humans to death.
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, the young generation can hardly pass away
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 diseases since health facilities basically are everywhere,
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 they can have proper treatment on time. That
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 leads to the growth of the population. In order to contain many
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 to live on the earth, which means
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 still use vehicles for transportation and cut trees for building fancy houses. It is a disadvantage for our environment.
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, SpaceX is considering taking outer space as the next colony for
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 taking all kinds of
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 to rebuild another planet.
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 are not taking the responsibility for using things with cherish.
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 are easily run out
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 reason. In conclusion, I think
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 are causing wounds to the environment because lifespans are longer than before, and young
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 cannot die easily. That causes resource shortages and ultimately leads humans to death.
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