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Some believe that showing people happy pictures (pictures in which outstanding achievements are made in helping the poor) is more effective in encouraging them to take action to solve poverty than sad pictures ( that show how hard life can be for the poor). Do you agree or disagree? Why?

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Many
people
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 think that illustrating
pictures
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 which happiness to achievements in helping
people
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 who suffer can persuade them to do more for the difficult solutions
instead
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 of sad
pictures
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. I strongly agree with
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 statement. Happy
pictures
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 can change
people
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's attitudes, particularly in developing countries. Many years ago, in developing countries,
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 as Thailand, a lot of poor
people
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 suffer from food and do not have homes. Several
people
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 try to provide them with some food, cloth, and employment.
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, they find it difficult to get good jobs because poor
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 do not educate.
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, many companies do not accept them to be their employees. Nowadays, the world has developed technology.
People
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 can access news and other information easier than in the past. Many helpful
pictures
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 are posted on social channels,
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 as Twitter, Instagram, and Facebook. These
pictures
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 persuade
people
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 to donate a lot of money for helping poor
people
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. The money they donate can provide poor
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 with food, cloth,
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 education.
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, sometimes poor
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 receive help from governments.
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, in my country, Thailand,
people
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 always share
pictures
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 of homeless
people
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 and poor
people
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 on social networks. As soon as the government see these
pictures
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, they will try to help homeless
people
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 by providing jobs for them.
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, the government provides scholarships for
people
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 who can get high grades in school and university. In conclusion, the happy
pictures
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 that show helping some poor
people
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 are extremely crucial because they can persuade
people
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 to help poor
people
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 and provide a lot of opportunities for them.
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