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Some people believe that new science related to criminal forensics should be used to look at old cases To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The world has developed, which means science and technology
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 no comparison to the past.
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, it can be argued that we should use
this
advance
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 science in order to solve old cases that
has
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 not been
close
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 yet.
To begin
 with, some people hold the view that it is inappropriate and a complete waste of time and energy to reopen, even
relatively
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 old cases. The reason why is that there are many new and definitely more important investigations
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happening in the world that are more essential to
solve
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 rather than some old conflicts that took place in the past.
On the other hand
,back
to
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 those days, many investigations were shut down because of the lack of proper
equipments
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 and apt technology.
Consequently
,
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justice did not serve
for
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many dangerous criminals who deserved the death penalty.
In addition
. In my point of view,
this
 function has an efficient influence on today's criminals to illustrate,it gives them the message that the crimes that were committed years ago
has
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 been solved so eventually it is just a matter of time
you
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 will be arrested as well. In conclusion, there are no drawbacks
of
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 using
the
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related science to reopen old cases.
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