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Percentage of government spending on road and transport in (1990-2005)

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The bar chart illustrates the government authorities allocated
budget
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a budget
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 for
road
 and
transport
 in four different countries between 1990 and 2005 years. It can be clearly seen , that Portugal devoted
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the
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highest percentage of money to
country's
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the country's
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 infrastructure of the way in 1990. But in the UK all over the period spent the lowest money on highways. Portugal and Italy allocated a high percentage of the budget for the
road
 and
transport
 systems, but Portugal declined slightly over the year from 28 per
cent
 to 20 per
cent
,
while
 Italy spent fluctuated on
transport
 system development . The USA and the UK and USA
government
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governments
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 spent
moderatedly
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moderately
moderated
 from 8 per
cent
 to 15 per
cent
for
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on
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 their
transport
 and
road
 systems. In 1990
UK
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the UK
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 government authorities spent 10
ratio
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ratios
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 of
money
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their money
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for
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on
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road
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the road
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 system and
equally
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 ratio of
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the
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budget devoted in
USA
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the USA
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 but after 5
year
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years
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for
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to
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highways
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