The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graphs compare electrical tools
ownerships
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ownership
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and usage of them per
households
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household
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in
given
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period started from 1920 to 2019. It can be clearly seen that the weekly time consumed on
houseworks
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housework
decreased dramatically
while
keeping
the
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electronic items has shown
rise
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a rise
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of
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popularity. In 1920,
houseworks
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housework
which
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spent
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on
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a week accounted for 50
hours
.
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the same year, nobody did
not
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have a refrigerator but
washing
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a washing
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machine was commonly used by 40 % of households. From 1920 to 1980, individuals spent less time year to year in
houseworks
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housework
,
this
trend was significantly reduced from 50 to 20
hours
. For the same period, refrigerator usage
has
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increased sharply, which means
resulted
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all of the houses have their own freezer by 1980. Between 1980 to 2019,
hours
consumption
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in
houseworks
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housework
slightly decreased to 10
hours
per week. Indeed,
vacum
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vacuum
cleaner has reached
its
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their
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maximum
of
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potential by 100 % proportion of
house
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the house
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using
it
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them
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. At the same time, washing machine ownership saw a moderate upward trend from 65 % of house
ownerships
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ownership
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to just around
three quarters
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three-quarters
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of it.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words houseworks, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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