ILife has become much more stressful compared to our parent’s generation. As a result, stress-related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such widespread in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the contemporary epoch, individuals are obliged to struggle with bigger and more whimsical conditions than
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these situations cause more stressful life events and
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for people. In
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more sophisticated features to make decisions and fulfilling them.
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more stressful moments for
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are already fond of living
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comfortable houses and own to more expensive cars.
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normally stay at work for long hours to gain more money.
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of the stress-related illnesses every person has to decrease relatively utilizing spending time on social media. At the same time, the government impose some decisions regarding
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working hours.
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at home, it will be more productive and purposeful. From
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my point of view, the daily stress rate is decreased considerably in
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of each of the methods. In conclusion, we cannot persist
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • competitive job market
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • fluctuating economies
  • family dynamics
  • urbanization
  • mental health
  • stress-related illnesses
  • reporting biases
  • job insecurities
  • anxiety
  • social media pressures
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