The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
The given diagram demonstrates the procedure of
electricity
generation by using geothermal power,
water
and industrial equipment.
Overall
, the whole process includes five continuous stages from leading the
water
under the ground
firstly
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to the produced
electricity
, which is transferred to the power tower used for publishing
electricity
at the end
.
Firstly
, the cold
water
is deeply pumped down into a 4.5 km tunnel. After that the
water
is completely injected,
it
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and it
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steams along a geothermal zone recognized by hot rocks
surrounded
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this
area. So, the temperature of
water
rises much enough to become extremely hot and ready to pump up by the second tunnel
that is
as deep as the first one.
Further
, the produced hot
water
is pumped up to reach
surface
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and evaporates in a condenser.
Moreover
,
at
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the fourth phase, the steam is directed to a turbine through a lid. The turbine is powered by steam and attached to a generator obliged to produce
electricity
. Eventually, the
electricity
is displaced to the power tower.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "firstly".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • geothermal energy
  • generate electricity
  • diagram
  • volcano
  • magma reservoirs
  • deep underground
  • heat
  • steam
  • geothermal plant
  • turbine
  • condensed
  • pumped back
  • underground reservoirs
  • transmitted
  • power grid
  • distribution
  • continuous
  • renewable
  • volcanic activity
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