The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

#energy #electricity

The given diagram demonstrates the procedure of

electricity

generation by using geothermal power,

water

and industrial equipment.

Overall

, the whole process includes five continuous stages from leading the

water

under the ground

firstly

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first

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to the produced

electricity

, which is transferred to the power tower used for publishing

electricity

at the end

Firstly

, the cold

water

is deeply pumped down into a 4.5 km tunnel. After that the

water

is completely injected,

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and it

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steams along a geothermal zone recognized by hot rocks

surrounded

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surrounding

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this

area. So, the temperature of

water

rises much enough to become extremely hot and ready to pump up by the second tunnel

that is

as deep as the first one.

Further

, the produced hot

water

is pumped up to reach

surface

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the surface

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and evaporates in a condenser.

Moreover

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the fourth phase, the steam is directed to a turbine through a lid. The turbine is powered by steam and attached to a generator obliged to produce

electricity

. Eventually, the

electricity

is displaced to the power tower.

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Topic Vocabulary:

geothermal energy
generate electricity
diagram
volcano
magma reservoirs
deep underground
heat
steam
geothermal plant
turbine
condensed
pumped back
underground reservoirs
transmitted
power grid
distribution
continuous
renewable
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