The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
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The given diagram demonstrates the procedure of
electricity
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generation by using geothermal power,
water
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and industrial equipment.
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, the whole process includes five continuous stages from leading the
water
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under the ground
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firstly
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to the produced
electricity
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, which is transferred to the power tower used for publishing
electricity
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at the end
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.
Firstly
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, the cold
water
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is deeply pumped down into a 4.5 km tunnel. After that the
water
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is completely injected,
it
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steams along a geothermal zone recognized by hot rocks
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this
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area. So, the temperature of
water
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rises much enough to become extremely hot and ready to pump up by the second tunnel
that is
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as deep as the first one.
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, the produced hot
water
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is pumped up to reach
surface
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and evaporates in a condenser.
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,
at
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the fourth phase, the steam is directed to a turbine through a lid. The turbine is powered by steam and attached to a generator obliged to produce
electricity
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. Eventually, the
electricity
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is displaced to the power tower.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "firstly".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • geothermal energy
  • generate electricity
  • diagram
  • volcano
  • magma reservoirs
  • deep underground
  • heat
  • steam
  • geothermal plant
  • turbine
  • condensed
  • pumped back
  • underground reservoirs
  • transmitted
  • power grid
  • distribution
  • continuous
  • renewable
  • volcanic activity
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