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Some people believe that all company decision should be taken by managers, whereas, others think it is better to include employees while decision making ? Discuss both points and give your opinion

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Making the right
decision
 about the status of the
company
 is very crucial for the
company
's growth, And many people believe that when making
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decision
 is a collective effort.
Although
 it is very important to hear some employees' decisions, The final say should be for hiring managers.
Firstly
, for some people who say companies should involve their employees in making a
decision
 to fast track and have many more ideas, it is true to include some of the old employees because they have more length of service compared to some executives.
For example
 my
company
 now, We open a new Bodyshop Branch here in Dammam, And we have a new manager who is very new here in our shop, He lacks
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experience
to
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 running the business so he always consults me every time he makes decisions because I'm more than 10 years working here in our
company
.
Secondly
, when making good
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decisions decisions
 it should be the higher management to decide on what is best for the
company
 because it is very crucial for the growth of the association if they failed to make fast and accurate decisions
also
 some managers and executives have the knowledge to run the
company
. In conclusion, I firmly believe that when making the right
decision
, it should be higher management have the final see.
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