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Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea.Some people think they should be banned.Do you agree or disagree. Give examples for your answers.

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Rubber
bags
 used in shopping attribute to the pollution of our land and river bodies.
People
 have the view that a ban should be placed on its
useage
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usage
. Plastic
bags
 in one way or
the
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another
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 other helps us in
packaging
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the packaging
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 of
food
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a food
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 product.
on
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this
era
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 most
people
 rely on these
bags
wheneve
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whenever
 they go shopping. But it has been observed that the use of these
bags
 causes us more harm than good. It is of
these effect
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this effect
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 that
people
 are now against its use and asking for a ban to be placed on its use. I strongly agree with these
people
 in that the harm
these
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this
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 product causes to our land and sea outweighs
its
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their
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 benefit to mankind.
This
 essay will elaborate
the
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 drawbacks of patronizing its
useage
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usage
.
Firstly
, during the production of these plastics, harmful chemicals are
release
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 into the atmosphere. these deadly
substancesb
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substances
 ends up in our water bodies and land. When
this
 happens, poor fishes in the sea ingest the harmful particles
hence
 killing them or making them harmful for consumption by man.
Also
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 the emission of these
substance
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substances
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 becomes
poisionus
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poisonous
 to our
plant
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plants
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as well as
 the population when its inhaled.
Secondly
, improper disposal of these rubbers may end up choking our gutters and beaches. Taking kolegono beach, a popular beach in Ghana
for
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 example,
its
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it's
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 an eye-saw to visit
this
 beach.
this
 place was once a tourist site in the country but the story
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however
have
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 changed since it has now been
turn
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 into a refuge site for plastics.
This
 act has not only polluted the sea but
also
 taken away the revenue the government was gaining from there. Many
people
 will argue my point
in
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that, the
manufactoring
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manufacturing
 of
this
ite
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site
,
creat
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create
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employment for our youth,
whereas
its
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it's
it is
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 dumping on our lands serves as a source of
of
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fertilizer for our crops. But if
i
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 may ask, what is the essence of employment and a good harvest when these harmful chemicals are killing us slowly?
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