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The pie charts below show exports between the US and Vietnam. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The pie charts below show exports between the US and Vietnam. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given pie charts represent exports between two countries(the United States and
Vietnam
) and different areas of
exportation
products
 and their values in millions of
dollars
.
Overall
, the most valuable product
of
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Vietnam
 exporting to the US is Coffee and the cheapest exportations are garments and other
staffs
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staff
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.
In contrast
 to
Vietnam
,
US
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the US
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 exporting lots of industrial
products
such
 as machinery, cars and different
products
 but the most expensive exporting units are aircraft parts with 72
million
of
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dollars
 in value. Surprisingly the lowest income
providing
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 by exports is cars with 6
million
 of their value. If we scope much deeper to
Vietnam
 to US
exportation
, the second important
exportation
products
 of
Vietnam
 are Fruit and vegetables with 16
million
of
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dollars
.
On the other hand
, seafood and rice are pretty close to each other with 4.4
millons
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million
millions
 and 4.3
millions
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million
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 respectively. Back to the US and their
exportation
 to
Vietnam
, there are
products
 which are uncategorized with
valued
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a valued
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35
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at 35
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million
of
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dollars
.
Also
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 over 30
million
of
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dollars
 are earned
by
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from
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 machinery sales. Fertiliser and cotton are
also
 different
exportation
 areas with 16.5
million
 and 12
million
of
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dollars
 by order.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vietnam, exportation, products, dollars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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