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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?
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In today’s world, it is true that the ownership of
cars
 has risen sharply in the
last
 thirty years, which can be seen by
constant
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 traffic jams all over the world. I think
this
 is so true, and
this
 issue
also
 can be solved using a real measurement to discourage
people
 from owning
cars
 by the
government
.
To begin
 with, it is true that traffic jams are increasing over time periods and causing many effects around the globe.
Firstly
,
people
 like new things, especially when it comes to private vehicles. They can use all their savings for the sake of new
cars
 and have a prestigious lifestyle afterwards. They need to cope with a lavish environment that has high standards of living, one of which is having an expensive
car
.
Therefore
,
people
 will buy the newest version of a
car
 to enhance their self-esteem in public or impress certain circles.
Secondly
,
people
 who have
earnings
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 more than average
sometimes
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are sometimes
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 confuse
how
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about how
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 to spend their money except for their leisure.
Consequently
, they will buy expensive things and end up not using
it
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them
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 well.
This
 can be detrimental
for
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to
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 their surroundings.
However
, the
government
also
 can tackle
this
 problem in order to reduce the number of
cars
.
Government
 can make
a
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strict
regulation
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regulations
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to
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on
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 not having more than one
car
 so that
people
 will not spend their money on it.
For those
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Those
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 who want to have more than one
car
, they have to pay more taxes than the regular ones.
As a result
,
people
 will rethink before they purchase new
cars
 to make wise decisions. Other than that, the
government
 should show the
number of
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pollution rates in each city, and remind all
society
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of society
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 of the drawbacks and causes that can bring many dangers. The governance
also
 can make a campaign to use public transportation more often because of its facilities and is much more affordable than using private
cars
.
Thus
,
people
 will be more concerned about the advantages and disadvantages
from
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of
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 every action they take. In conclusion,
people
 need to be more aware
about
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 the impacts that might occur because of their actions. Having more
cars
 can cause many bad effects
for
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surrounding
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people
 and make more traffic jams. Given
this
 situation, I recommend
people
to
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use public transportation more often in order to save money and time.
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