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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative

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Smartphones
contributes
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 significantly to our daily necessities whether it is for an adult or
children
. In
this
 essay, we will take a look
on
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 both views. The first paragraph will discuss
about
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the importance of gadgets and
its
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 application and
then
 in the second
paragprah
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paragraph
, we will chew up on the
affect
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 on
children
's
academic
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. I wholeheartedly believe that the usage of
smartphones
 by
childrens
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 must be highly regulated, especially for academic purposes. Regarding the advantages of using
smartphones
 as youngsters, it enables them to access
a
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massive
education
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 material and application that supports their learning, simply on the tip of their finger.
For example
, online teaching webinar apps
such
 as Microsoft Teams and Zoom. The apps remove the barrier of location and allow them to do learning activities from everywhere and anywhere.
Furthermore
, the development of gadgets has sophisticated technologies
such
 as augmented reality and text-to-speech features,
the
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features foster the learning process of
children
.
However
, there is an emerging concern regarding the drawbacks of using
smartphones
.
Children
 are individuals that easily get distracted. For
instances
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,
the
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juvenile plays
an online mobile games
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online mobile games
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 during academic hours,
chatting
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 with each other, and
watching
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an entertainment videos
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entertainment videos
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. The activity removes the essence of education since it requires full attention,
eventually
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 the
children
 will not be able to use the knowledge in the long run.
Furthermore
, spending
excessive
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amount
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 of time is not a good sign since it will affect the social life of the youngsters since they are likely to not
paying
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 attention to those around them as a
results
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 it fails them to build a connection and social empathy.
To sum up
, there is no doubt that the usage of
smartphones
 by
the
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juveniles is a
double-edge
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 sword since it has
an
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enormous
features
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 that
helps
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 them to enhance their learning process despite the risk of losing the essence of education and social interaction benefits. I strongly for youngsters’ mobile phone regulation especially during their school time.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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