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What are the diseases caused due to stress? Present the causes and solutions of stress.

Nowadays, youngsters are facing a lot of health issues
due to
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 their sedentary lifestyle. Diseases like high blood pressure, diabetes type two, obesity, etc. can be commonly seen among them.
This
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 is because
stress
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 commonly accumulates in the belly or the thighs of humans, thereby leading to
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 problems. Some people believe that the causes of
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 diseases can be prevented by
practicing
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 various solutions at home.
This
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 essay will elucidate various causes and provide solutions
of
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 managing
stress
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 efficiently. In the contemporary era, youngsters try to do too many
things
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 at a time. Dedicating a reasonable amount of time at home, being the best at the workplace, regularly meeting friends and relatives, trying to learn something new in order to upskill themselves, etc., all at one go is next to impossible.
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, unhealthy eating and lifestyle
restricts
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 the flow of
stress
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-releasing
mechanism
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 in the body.
Due to
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this
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, people often worry about
things
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 that could be either completely unnecessary or easily manageable.
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, an obese individual quite often stresses
about
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weight reduction but doesn’t take
efforts
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 towards it.
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 a person fails to realise that kilos will not shred away by simply worrying about it. Definitely, it is necessary for one to plan and prioritise
things
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 in life. Without an effective plan, messing up between work and life is quite possible. So, planning and organising day-to-day activities will evidently help to manage
things
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 smoothly.
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, preparing an agenda at the start of the day will help humans to juggle between work and home
stress
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-free.
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, taking conscious efforts towards healthy munching, exercising regularly and dedicating reasonable time for meditation will enable the body to release
stress
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 out to the body. To cite an example, it is usually seen that meditation helps an individual to keep calm, focus on mental health and take appropriate decisions in life.
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, if people want to deal with
stress
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 and anxiety issues,
then
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 must work towards it. Focusing on self, preparing a
time-table
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, exercising regularly, etc. is a great mantra for
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stress
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-free and healthy living.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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