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The tourism industry has grown enourmously in the last fifty years, and there are few places that are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefit the countries which tourists visit. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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The
tourism
 industry has experienced a considerable increase in popularity over the
last
 fifty years. Resulting in almost no places that would not be influenced by
touristic
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 activity. Some people claim that
tourism
 does not bring many advantages to these visited places.
However
, I disagree and
hence
, in
this
essay
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 I will argue that
tourism
 enhances a country’s economic
situations
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situation
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 and helps with acquiring new languages.
Tourism
 creates opportunities for locals to set up profitable
buisnesses
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businesses
. There is a variety of services that can be offered to
tourists
such
 as hotels, restaurants or tour guides. Given that
such
buisnesses
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businesses
does
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do
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 not usually require a high qualification or years of education,
it
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they
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 can be especially beneficial for
the
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poorer citizens.
Hence
, the potential
in
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 reduction of wealth inequality can
imporve
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improve
overall
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 state of an economy.
For example
, Greece which is
a
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highly dependent on
tourism
 has experienced
a serious economic problems
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serious economic problems
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 with the COVID-19 pandemic that froze the
tourism
 industry. The benefit of
tourism
also
 lies in the cultural enrichment between
tourists
 and locals. As
tourist
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tourists
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 rarely speak the language of the country they visit, natives have to learn several words of the language
tourists
 speak in order to provide their services even though they might be reluctant to
it
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.
This
 can be the first step in learning
new
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 language, which can
then
 open door to new opportunities.
For example
, once a street market seller
learnes
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learners
learned
learns
 to communicate with
tourist
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tourists
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, he can be more successful in his selling. In conclusion, not only that
tourism
 can help a country with its citizens’ wealth it
also
encourage
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 them to learn new languages, which can lead to
further
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 development of the country.
Hence
, I
am
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firmly
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 that countries should welcome
tourists
 as they can be a source of
a
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great both
tangable
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tangible
 and
intangable
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intangible
 wealth.
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