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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers and books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
In
coming
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the coming
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 days most
of
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the
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apply
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people won't buy
paper based
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paper-based
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 articles, magazines or
books
 to read
instead
 they might choose to read
on
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apply
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ebooks or online. I totally agree with the statement.
This
 essay will examine the reasons why I support the statement with
the
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apply
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relevant examples .
Firstly
, these days many people carry smartphones with them where they can easily download or search and read
theirs
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their
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favorite
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favourite
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books
 or articles
on
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in
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 their free
time
.
For
instance
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,instance
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 if you want to read your
favorite
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favourite
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 book but you can't afford to buy it
on
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in
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 hard copy , you can go online and get the chance to read it
on
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for
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 free. And
also
 ebook is away easier to store and
it
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apply
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saves space at home or in your bag as well.
Moreover
, having
books
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booked
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 online or
in
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on
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 a device,
it
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apply
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is safer as well,
while
 paper can be damaged anytime
with
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by
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 water and other's things.
Secondly
, if people have
electronics
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electronic
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 devices
such
ebook
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as ebook
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 tablets, phones or computers,they can download and save
the
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apply
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books
 on file and they can read
it
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them
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 any
time
 when they are free. They can use their
time
while
 going
work
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to work
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 on the bus
,
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apply
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while
 spending free
time
 at home
,
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apply
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while
 having food or anytime. And
also
 if we download and save the files on smartphones or computers, we can send
it
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them
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 to anyone at
anytime
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any time
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 which will save money
also
.
However
, society
need
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needs
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 to buy printed newspapers or
books
 individually. In conclusion,
paper based
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paper-based
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 news articles or
books
 will replace slowly but surely with
ebook
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ebooks
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 or online on
electric
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an electric
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device
Fix the agreement mistake
devices
show examples
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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