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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers and books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
In
coming
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the coming
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 days most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people won't buy
paper based
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paper-based
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 articles, magazines or
books
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 to read
instead
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 they might choose to read
on
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apply
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ebooks or online. I totally agree with the statement.
This
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 essay will examine the reasons why I support the statement with
the
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apply
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relevant examples .
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, these days many people carry smartphones with them where they can easily download or search and read
theirs
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their
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favorite
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favourite
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books
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 or articles
on
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in
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 their free
time
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.
For
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instance
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,instance
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 if you want to read your
favorite
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favourite
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 book but you can't afford to buy it
on
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in
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 hard copy , you can go online and get the chance to read it
on
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for
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 free. And
also
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 ebook is away easier to store and
it
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saves space at home or in your bag as well.
Body paragraph 2
Moreover
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, having
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books
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booked
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 online or
in
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on
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 a device,
it
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apply
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is safer as well,
while
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 paper can be damaged anytime
with
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by
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 water and other's things.
Body paragraph 3
Secondly
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, if people have
electronics
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electronic
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 devices
such
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ebook
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as ebook
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 tablets, phones or computers,they can download and save
the
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apply
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books
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 on file and they can read
it
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them
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 any
time
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 when they are free. They can use their
time
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while
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 going
work
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to work
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 on the bus
,
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apply
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while
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 spending free
time
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 at home
,
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while
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 having food or anytime.
Body paragraph 4
And
also
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 if we download and save the files on smartphones or computers, we can send
it
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them
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 to anyone at
anytime
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any time
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 which will save money
also
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.
However
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, society
need
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needs
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 to buy printed newspapers or
books
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 individually.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
paper based
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paper-based
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 news articles or
books
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 will replace slowly but surely with
ebook
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ebooks
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 or online on
electric
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an electric
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device
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devices
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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