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computer games have negative effects on children's health and socializing,some argue that there are positives about playing computer games . discuss negatives and positives.

Computer
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games
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 have been a trend for 21 -the first generations , nowadays , no single home in the world has not played
video
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games
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 or even played with their friends on
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 networks , but the thing that
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 had a detrimental effect on the player. Some people fear the consequences on
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‘s health, and their social skills, despite the joy and feeling of accomplishment that accompanies these
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 , I will discuss these effects in the essay , and why
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 do have concerns about these playing
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 and
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 feel that they should be carefully monitored . Gaming could be harmful to
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’s health, and
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 gaming appears to be innocent , it is accompanied by dangerous health issues .
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 , obesity is increasing in society,and weight gain is spreading among youngsters ,particularly
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 playing excessive time
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computer
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games
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 ,Indeed,
video
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games
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 are associated with less movement and some people have had signs of muscular atrophy
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 general
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 as eyesight problems , and hearing issues . Another serious issue with
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games
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,
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is that
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 players lose social interaction with others , eventually leading to detachment from reality , in some cases recorded,
children
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 heard hallucinations
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and
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 diagnosed with autism.
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, despite all
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 , actually playing
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games
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 is fun and some scientists suggest that some
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 play
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games
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 for developing mental and cognitive skills ,
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 , some learn maths and counting in a beautiful
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 game and assisted virtual reality .
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, there are supporters of
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 game despite all the bad side effects . In conclusion, there should be an observation for these activities to ensure that no harm in these
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,
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 those which proved to profit the
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 should be encouraged and supervised by their parents .

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