Fast food is a part of life in some places. Some people think that this has bad effects on lifestyles and diet. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that the main impact of
junk
food
is arguable. It is
commonly
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held belief that
food
high in fats and sugars can have a negative influence on public everyday
life
and diet. In my opinion, I consider that eating
junk
food
may have an adverse effect on an individual
life
. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain my point of view.
To begin
with, consuming
junk
food
may negatively affect public health.
For instance
,
people
tend
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who tend
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to consume fast
food
are more prone to metabolic diseases
such
as obesity, diabetes and high
cholestrol
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cholesterol
. To illustrate,
this
kind of
food
might
contained
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a huge amount of oil which may accumulate in the blood vessels and leads to many heart diseases. Indeed, it becomes apparent that fast
food
can
adverely
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adversely
affect
people
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health.
Moreover
,
junk
food
may
harmfuly
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harmful
harmfully
impact the individual learning and memory.
For example
, a prestigious journal article published a recent study which discussed the
long term
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effects of eating fast
food
, the study showed that
the
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people
who consume
high
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a high
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amount
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amounts
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of
junk
food
for
long
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a long
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period
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periods
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of time, tend to be affected
with
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depression
as well as
they had some problems in learning and memory. Clearly,
people
may find it easier to eat fast
food
reguraly
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regularly
.
On the other hand
, they have neglected the
long time
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influence which might deteriorate their
life
and cause more serious issues.
Thus
,
this
makes it clear that consuming
such
food
will cause dangerous problems for
people
. In conclusion, fast
food
may ease
society
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life
,
however
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,however
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it may affect them negatively. I
strongely
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strongly
believe that consuming
such
food
that
full
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is full
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with
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of
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saturated fats, salts and sugars may deteriorate community health
on
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in
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short
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the short
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and long term, and
hence
more focus requires.
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