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Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Today, with the development of the
fashion
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 industry and the increasing popularity of glamour magazines
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millions
 of
people
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 try to follow
fashion
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trends
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.
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, others argue that all these
trends
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 should not be followed and we should wear whatever we like. I completely agree with
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 position.
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, I simply think that an average
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 not following
fashion
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trends
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 looks much better than an average
person
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 who follows them. The reason is that the majority of
people
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 wearing
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this
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these
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 fancy
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 just buy the same simple
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 with a
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 logo on
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them
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.
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, they can not fit what they bought and
as a
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result
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 start looking horrible. In my opinion, a
person
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 knowing how to fit
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clothes
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 properly looks much better than a
person
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 with
luxury
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a luxury
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 logo on his t-shirt.
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, it is really hard and expensive to follow changing year-to-year
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.
For instance
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, we can recall
to
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any
fashion
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 brand or magazine. They change their main
trends
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 every season,
even
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and even
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 the main colours could be different. And if you do not have a lot of money and a desire to change your whole wardrobe twice a year, you should not try to follow the
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, I think that you do not have to follow
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trends
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. I am not against expensive high-quality
clothes
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, but in most
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people
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 buy
it
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them
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 to follow the
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, but not for the quality. Recalling
to
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people
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, wearing
a
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simple fitting well
clothes
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, I think they look really good, and looking good is the most important in choosing
clothes
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