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Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Today, with the development of the
fashion
 industry and the increasing popularity of glamour magazines
milliones
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millions
 of
people
 try to follow
fashion
trends
.
However
, others argue that all these
trends
 should not be followed and we should wear whatever we like. I completely agree with
this
 position.
Firstly
, I simply think that an average
person
 not following
fashion
trends
 looks much better than an average
person
 who follows them. The reason is that the majority of
people
 wearing
this
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these
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 fancy
clothes
 just buy the same simple
clothes
 with a
fashion
 logo on
it
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them
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.
Moreover
, they can not fit what they bought and
as a
result
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,result
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 start looking horrible. In my opinion, a
person
 knowing how to fit
the
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clothes
 properly looks much better than a
person
 with
luxury
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a luxury
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 logo on his t-shirt.
Secondly
, it is really hard and expensive to follow changing year-to-year
trends
.
For instance
, we can recall
to
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any
fashion
 brand or magazine. They change their main
trends
 every season,
even
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and even
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 the main colours could be different. And if you do not have a lot of money and a desire to change your whole wardrobe twice a year, you should not try to follow the
trends
.
Overall
, I think that you do not have to follow
fashion
trends
. I am not against expensive high-quality
clothes
, but in most
cases
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people
 buy
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
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 to follow the
trends
, but not for the quality. Recalling
to
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people
, wearing
a
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simple fitting well
clothes
, I think they look really good, and looking good is the most important in choosing
clothes
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