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Some people spend most of their lives living close to Where They were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Much of
people
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’s identity
are
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 provided by the
place
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 of born. Costumes and idioms,
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, are things that are particularly from some areas. Probably it is because of
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 that
people
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 may spend most part of their life
at
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 the same region. In a way, not moving to other places can bring
estabilty
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stability
 and more
money
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, in an Other way can make
people
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 less
tolerate
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to
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 diversity and prejudiced. Living
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 the same region is a good way to save
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Money
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through
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 time. It is possible to know significantly well the location to know where is the cheaper gas station to fuel the Vehicle.
Addionatly
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, it can be part of the routine to go to the cheaper market
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 the
neighborhood
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. With time
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this
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 little daily
actitudes
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attitudes
aptitudes
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a
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save an expressive amount of
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.
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, a problem of living
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 the same
place
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 for too long is getting blindness
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 other things around. Probably the
proccess
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process
 of
meating
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meeting
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people
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 that has different culture is a problem. It is common to see some places
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 the habitants are hostile to tourists.
People
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 in general are not used to the unusual. In conclusion,
people
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 can save
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Money
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 by staying
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 the same
place
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 life, but at the same
time
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this
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 experience can bring blindness to outsider events. Daily routines are easier When the
place
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 is well known,
as well as
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 knowing the cheaper places to go.
Unfortunatly
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Unfortunately
 it is easy to become prejudiced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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