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Some people spend most of their lives living close to Where They were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Much of
people
’s identity
are
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 provided by the
place
 of born. Costumes and idioms,
for example
, are things that are particularly from some areas. Probably it is because of
this
 that
people
 may spend most part of their life
at
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 the same region. In a way, not moving to other places can bring
estabilty
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stability
 and more
money
, in an Other way can make
people
 less
tolerate
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to
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 diversity and prejudiced. Living
at
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 the same region is a good way to save
Money
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money
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through
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 time. It is possible to know significantly well the location to know where is the cheaper gas station to fuel the Vehicle.
Addionatly
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Additionally
, it can be part of the routine to go to the cheaper market
at
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 the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. With time
this
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these
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 little daily
actitudes
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attitudes
aptitudes
 turn to
a
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save an expressive amount of
Money
.
Altough
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Although
, a problem of living
at
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 the same
place
 for too long is getting blindness
about
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 other things around. Probably the
proccess
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process
 of
meating
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meeting
 with new
people
 that has different culture is a problem. It is common to see some places
that
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 the habitants are hostile to tourists.
People
 in general are not used to the unusual. In conclusion,
people
 can save
Money
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 by staying
at
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 the same
place
 for all of
the
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 life, but at the same
time
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this
 experience can bring blindness to outsider events. Daily routines are easier When the
place
 is well known,
as well as
 knowing the cheaper places to go.
Unfortunatly
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Unfortunately
 it is easy to become prejudiced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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