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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reason for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages

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In the past, it was very difficult to have access to information, but now information about different cities or countries is well distributed. There are people that are born
at
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 a
neighboarhood
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neighbourhood
 and spend their whole
lifes
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lives
life
 living close to it.
This
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explore
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 those reasons, the advantages and the disadvantages of living close to the place you
where
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were
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 born for your entire
life
. The reason
of
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 living close to where you have grown up
are
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also
 considered
advantages
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advantage
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,
such
 as being familiar with the
area
 and being close to family and friends. Living in a place you know the
area
 can be very comfortable because you are aware of
where
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whether
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 is safe or not,
where
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and where
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 are the best schools, supermarkets or stores. At the same time, living always in the same
area
 usually means that you will always have your family and friend around, which means having
suport
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support
 and company whenever you
need
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.
On the other hand
, there are
disadvanges
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disadvantages
 of living always in the same region. Depending on where you work or with what you work, not moving to a
a
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new
area
 can imply spending a lot of time
on
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trafic
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traffic
 or even having
less
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fewer
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 job opportunities. Living always
at
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 the same
neighboardhood
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neighbourhood
 can lead you to avoid changes, and
this
 can have a big impact on your
life
 because you would probably miss opportunities of
growing
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 in the personal and
profissional
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professional
 field with experiences about new habits and customs. As said before, knowing the pros and cons of the region and being close to friends and family can be considered the reasons and
also
 the
advanges
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advantages
 of living the whole
life
at
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 the same place.
Although
,
this
 can imply living away from work or missing
life changing
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opportuinities
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opportunities
.
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  • Migration
  • Settlement
  • Hometown
  • Roots
  • Community
  • Emotional attachment
  • Sense of familiarity
  • Social network
  • Bond
  • Safety
  • Proximity
  • Support system
  • Heritage
  • Limited options
  • Risk aversion
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Unfamiliarity
  • Exploration
  • Adventurous spirit
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