The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land become lesson productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

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farming land deteriorates

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illustrates how three regions of the planet were affected by these factors in the 1990s. As you can see all I have done is change the words in the questions using synonyms and

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connected them using the word ‘

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’. We can clearly see from the

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chart that there are three primary

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of farmland degradation, and over-grazing is the major one. The

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shows that Europe had a far higher percentage of unproductive land compared to the other two regions in

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I have picked out the main features from each graph and

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them in a general way. Notice that I have not included any numbers. We will support our ideas with

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in the next two paragraphs.

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, notice that I am using the present simple for the

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chart because there is no date and the past tense for the

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because it was in the 1990s. The

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chart represents four

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, with over-grazing representing the biggest proportion at just over a third. Widespread clearing of trees and the over-use of crops constitute nearly

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and just over a quarter respectively. Here I have varied my language by using synonyms for the

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and proportions and fractions for the data. The

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shows that nearly

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of Europe’s entire surface had fallen victim to degeneration. Only a small proportion of North America’s total land became less productive at 5% and Oceania was marginally higher with a value of 13%.