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The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better to spend on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #governments #space #programmes #services #schools #hospitals
In
this
 contemporary ,epoch there is
the
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 heated argument over the issue that some individuals concur that
fund
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 should be spent on slot programmes would be better
while
 others oppose the notion that cash should be spent on public facilities like schools and hospitals.I strongly agree with
this
 mentioned phenomenon.
However
,supporting points will be discussed in the upcoming paragraph. There is adequate evidence of the former view which
are
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 substantial.The first and foremost reason is to pay
out
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bills on slot technology is a waste of salary because if the government should occupy the payment for distance travellers they have to spend millions of dollars
in
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one
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finding research
therefore
, the government or people
also
 strange from
that
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if they get benefits from that research or not.Adding more to it rule squander a lot of
fund
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 on scientists to find water and land on the moon but in our ,community nobody should take benefit of that founded investigation. Probing ahead administration should have to spend
fund
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 on
school
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schools
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instead
 of paying for arena exploration because if the state should invest cash in law schools
then
 the children can get a better education
as well as
 they
also
 will get better facilities and atmosphere
such
 as computers labs,libraries,playgrounds etc.,
Initially
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 law should have to invest paying in hospitals as well so people will get excellent treatment and many more benefits like they will get medical funds,good doctors etc.,
Moreover
 most significant reason is spending capital on public services it attracts more tourists to the nation so it is
also
 beneficial for the nation of the economy.
To conclude
 occupying cash on public services is better growth for individuals' future
instead
 of spending bills on arena exploration. Individuals should get more benefits for their families
as well as
 it is
also
 beneficial for the nation of growth.
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