The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The given figure illustrates the production of
sugar
procedure from sugarcanes
. Overall
, there are seven stages that cover the process starting from growing sugarcane up to sugar
ready to consume.
At the beginning of the process, planting sugarcanes
until they grow takes from 12-18 months. Secondly
, harvesting comes next using advanced technology or manually by the hands of the workers. Next,
the sugarcanes
are crushed into juice that would be purified using a limestone filter.
In the fifth stage, the sugarcanes
heated up until they evaporate and formed a syrup. Then
, the syrup is centrifuged in a centrifuge where the separation of sugar
crystals from syrup happens. Finally
, the sugar
is made after drying and cooling the product.Submitted by rahafmesh on
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