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In your opinion, do you think that all children should be taught in a school environment? Say why you think home-schooling would not be a good idea and also point out some benefits for this chosen form of education.

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Nowadays, education is one of the most important things that everyone had to pursue. In the previous era, students learned their education in school.
However
, these days, most people prefer home-schooling which is not really a good idea. In my opinion, I completely agree with
this
 statement.
this
 essay will elaborate on my reasons in upcoming paragraphs which will lead us to a logical conclusion. There are several benefits that students can avail
while
 learning in school.
To begin
 with, extracurricular activities help kids to gain knowledge other than studies .
For example
, In school, there are a lot of opportunities where you can explore yourself other than studies like sports and some club activities.
In addition
, you can improve your communication skills
while
 interacting with other students.
finally
, I would say that It is the place where you can make
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social development
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Curriculum
  • Pedagogy
  • Diversity
  • Structured learning
  • Professional educators
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Real-world challenges
  • Cultural exposure
  • Societal norms
  • Homeschooling
  • Peer relationships
  • Skill acquisition
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