More and more people are shifting to cities from countryside. Do this have advantages or disadvantages on environment?

The modern life nowadays, big city citizens have tendencies to move out from their places to stay closer to
natural
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.
This
might negatively impact
to
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the
environment
like deforestation and deteriorate the natural
inhabitat
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habitat
of wild
animals
. For urbanizing preparation, human needs more
spaces
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to build
house
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a house
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,
therefore
they will cut down
trees
for building
up
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the
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residential areas.
This
action will harm the
environment
by lower the tree numbers
whereas
trees
can absorb the CO2 and prevent floods. Taking Dalat, a lovely plateau city in Vietnam as an example. Because of intense urbanization that
against
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the maximum capacity of
this
city,
government
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allowed the policy to cut down many
trees
for business houses. That caused a huge flood in 2005 that would be prevented by tree walls. The
repurcussion
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repercussion
repercussions
of urbanization is not only
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impact
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to
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human
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the human
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environment
but
also
negative
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affect
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effect
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to
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animals
. Reducing the
trees
are lower the natural
inhabitats
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habitats
inhabitants
of wild
animals
, it means
human
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humans
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, the intruders push the
animals
out of
its
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lives and force them to find
another places
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. Wild
animals
might move to cities and harm human life. As the result, if that story
happen
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in a long term, that scene can cause ecosystem
unbalance
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. Moving out
the
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cities to reach the remote areas tends to cause negative effects
to
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the
environment
, specifically to lower the number
trees
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of trees
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and natural
inhabitats
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habitats
inhabitants
of wild
animals
. In my perspective,
government
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should impose strict laws to prevent
undercontrol
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under control
urbanization in the future.
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