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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.
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The pie chart demonstrates the most ordinary positive and negative features on Bowen
Island
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This
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 investigation was taken by the
travelers
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travellers
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Overall
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, the most common merit is that
people
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 live on the
island
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 when the disadvantage is the cost of living is too high to survive.
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 with the disadvantages, half of the
people
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 think the price of groceries is too high to live in Bowen
Island
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while
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 25% of visitors consider entertainment is worse.
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, there are 15% and 10% of
people
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 think the weather and the quality of food are a demerit in Bowen
Island
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On the other hand
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, 42% of tourists believe the
people
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 who live on the
island
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 are an advantage,
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 35% of
people
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 believe the landscape is better than expected. 12% of
people
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 think culture is the most important thing to experience.
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, there are only 11% of tourists feel accommodation is good enough.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, people with synonyms.
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