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What is altruism. Explain and use specif examples.

#altruism #specif
According to
 the lecture, altruism, a type of
behavior
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behaviour
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 which
oppose
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opposes
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 selfishness, is not always only a matter of benevolence. In fact, the reading passages
points
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 out how could be dangerous for an animal helps the group
making
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make
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 the sentinel. The lecture
is not agree
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is not agreed
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 about that because that specific animal with that role has more
chances
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 to survive.
For instance
, when the predator is coming the
sentile
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senile
centile
sensible
 being the first to see it can have the opportunity to escape immediately. At the same
time
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 the sentinel has more possibilities to escape
also
 because the group tries to defend
himself
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itself
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 with the union but at the same time it can draw predator attention,
while
 the sentinel alone can escape more easily.
Moreover
, even if some species, as the reading says, feel happy being altruistic, the lecture underlines that not everyone has
this
 type of feeling.
Donate
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 a kidney could be a selfless act, but maybe for someone
has
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who has
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 no material reward back, it is
no
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not
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valuable
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value
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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