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The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.
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These pie charts display the most important reasons why people immigrated to and emigrated from the
UK
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 in 2007.
Overall
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, it can be noted the vast majority of
emigrants
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 had professional motives to leave the
UK
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, either because they had secured a job abroad or were aiming to find one.
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, career choices were
also
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 important drivers to come to the
UK
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,
although
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 the proportion of
immigrants
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 looking for a job was not as high as those of
emigrants
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. Another noteworthy reason for immigration was education. A closer analysis of the figures shown in these charts reveals that the percentage of
immigrants
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 and
emigrants
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 moving
due to
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 a definite position was almost identical, standing at 30% and 29% respectively. Another similarity between these two groups is the proportion of people moving to accompany or join a partner, which amounts to 15% of
immigrants
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 and 13% of
emigrants
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. Apart from these similarities, two striking differences can be identified.
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, 26% of all
immigrants
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 in 2007 came to the
UK
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 to receive
formal
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 education,
whereas
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 only 4% of
emigrants
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 had educational motives to move away from the
UK
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 in that year.
Secondly
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, the reason for arrival in the
UK
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 was unknown for only 6% of people, as opposed to 18% of
emigrants
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 not stating a reason for departure.

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