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Families who sent their children to private school not be required to pay taxs' that support State education system.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#families #children #school #taxs #support #education #system
Some argue that there is no need to pay
tax
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taxes
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 for aiding
state
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the state
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 education system if their
children
 study in a private
school
. I strongly oppose
this
 Statement because it is against their social responsibility and can create inequality among
people
.
Firstly
, paying
taxes
 to a country is a legal responsibility of
its'
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its
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 citizens because it is used for supporting different sectors like health and education.
Hences
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Hence
, if a group of
people
 decide not to pay their
taxes
 because
of
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their
children
 are being educated
from
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in
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 private schools
then
 it will be a huge burden for poor families to pay for all those
taxes
 and eventually,
this
 will decrease
economy
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the economy
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 of a country and can have a negative impact on
children
 from
poor
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the poor
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back ground
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background
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. So, in that sense,
i
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I
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 think that it is appropriate not to pay
taxes
 in a society
Secondly
, every child has the right to be educated .
Therefore
, not paying
tax
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taxes
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 is an opposition to
right
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the right
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 to be educated. As we know that not all families can't afford to pay for
private
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a private
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school
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schools
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 to educate their
children
.
hence
, the only way for those
people
 is to send their
children
 to
state
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a state
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school
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schools
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 to
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be educated
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educated
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educate
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.
Moreover
, it can
also
 create
an
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inequality among
people
 only rich
people
 will be educated in society
whereas
other
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others
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 will not.
As a
result
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,result
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 it will cause
racisim
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racism
 in communities.
Therefore
, paying
tax
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taxes
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 is important whether
children
are
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apply
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a study
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study
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studying
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 in private or
a
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apply
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state schools.
To conclude
,
i
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I
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 strongly oppose the idea of
tax
 exemption for
people
who's
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whose
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children
 are in private
school
 and
other's
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others
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 who pay
for
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apply
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the levy for the progress of the country and for their
children
's future
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