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Some people think that activities during the free-time should be planned while others disagree. Discuss both sides and include examples and relevant data from your own experience

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In today’s
time
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 and age, everyone is so busy and occupied with work.
People
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 hardly get any
time
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 for pastime
activities
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. An ongoing debate highlights a similar issue where some
people
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 believe that pastime activity should not be planned
whereas
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others are of the opinion that it should be planned and scheduled beforehand. Planned leisure activity has many advantages. One
out
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of
many
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the many
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 benefits is, it saves the person from wasting
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,
exploring
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and exploring
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 options.
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, if a family plan their
vacation
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 early, they might end up booking a flight and a good hotel at a reasonable price.
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, it would help
people
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 in choosing a better place for
vacation
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.
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 would save
their
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time
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, money and energy.
On the other hand
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, if someone goes without any proper planning he might have to compromise on some details.
People
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 usually
decides
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their
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on their
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vacation
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 five months earlier
according to
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 a survey.
Although
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 some
people
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 get satisfaction from planning earlier
but
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, I personally think that planned
activities
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 do not give you excitement or
adrenaline
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an adrenaline
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 rush. It more seems like a task that should be done in
a
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 free
time
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.
According to
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 a survey by Pakistan national tourism academy,
people
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 who don’t plan their leisure
activities
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 be it a
vacation
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, sports, reading, gardening, playing
videogames
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video games
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, meeting close friends/ family or simply going on a drive are much happier when compared to
people
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 who plan everything.
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, unplanned activity does take up half of
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 free
time
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 in thinking and deciding what should he or she do. In conclusion, both sides have their pros and cons. Planned
activities
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 give you relaxation and peace of mind and
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unplanned ones pump you up.
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