In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?
In
a large amounts
of areas, new Correct the article-noun agreement
a large amount
large amounts
houses
are continually required by residents
. Unfortunately, buildings for them are limited,
and expect to construct properties in Remove the comma
apply
rural
Add an article
a rural
the rural
area
. Some claim Fix the agreement mistake
areas
that is
significant to preserve the country
region rather than build new Change noun form
country's
houses
there. In this
essay, I will analyse both sides of this
issue, and declare my points completely.
Firstly
, increasing
population in modern cities have invaded the edge of the urban area, even in the country area Correct article usage
the increasing
due to
lack
of space inside the city. Engineering contractors are developing many more Correct article usage
the lack
big scale
Add a hyphen
big-scale
of
properties under authorization by the government. Change preposition
apply
Thus
, it is not avoidable to cause various pollution and affect ecological balance. For instance
, the
birds and small animals are normally seen in the countryside, but today, the community rarely find them there. A natural Correct article usage
apply
envrionment
is facing severe challenges.
Correct your spelling
environment
On the other hand
, over crowded
Correct your spelling
overcrowded
houses
and buildings are
not only impact Unnecessary verb
apply
original
humans' Correct article usage
the original
lifestyle
but Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
also
affect new residents
' living quality. They have to commute and take long
time on the road Change the article
a long
everyday
. A number of waste gas and noise generated by the city and the extended Replace the word
every day
residental
places directly influence people's health and children's growth. A set of Correct your spelling
residential
mechanism
should issue and release to guarantee better ways of life Fix the agreement mistake
mechanisms
to
all citizens.
In my point of view, municipal construction and environmental protection can be both critical. Change preposition
for
The sustainable
development should protect the environment well and encourage continual construction for Correct article usage
Sustainable
further
requests from new residents
as well. Thus
, to deduct
soil resource occupancy is an acceptable solution.
Change the verb form
deducting
To sum up
, a city's development depends on highly effective management to introduce and build necessary houses
for residents
. Likewise
, the authorities should establish policies and regulations to ensure a
sustainable development Remove the article
apply
in stead
of a short-term economy in the future.Correct your spelling
instead
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