SOME PEOPE SAY THAT PEOPLE SHOULD ENCOURAGE THEIR CHILDREN TO TAKE PART IN ORGANISED GROUP ACTIVITIES IN THEIR FREE TIME. OTHERS SAY IT IS IMPORTANT FOR CHILDREN TO LEARN HOW TO OCCUPY THEMSELVES ON THEIR OWN. DICUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION

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Nowadays children can employ their spare time in various different ways, both

paretcipating

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participating

in individual or

gruop

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group

activities. On one hand,

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teens

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decisions on what they can do when they are free can make them more

indipendent

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independent

on the other hand

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, someone might feel lonely or get really bored by playing alone. By joining a group you are able to make friends, find out new intriguing points of view, you learn how to collaborate and

also

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how to respect other people.

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, being part of a

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team helps to find people who share your same interests that can become a lot more than just

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teammates

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, it can lead to a lack of ability to spend time on your own. From a completely different point of thought, if as a parent you insist that your sons and daughters learn how to use free time without needing someone else with them, they are probably going to be more

indipendent

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independent

and less needy in every day to day

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of life. In fact, a child that since a very young age had to deal with problems on his own and develop his

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skills is going to thrive in situations where he is left with little to

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directions on what to do. In conclusion, both these educational approaches are valid, the former focused on forming a really sociable person and the latter on teaching

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live easily on your own. From my point of view, social opinion is really

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relevant

these days, so, it is easier to grow being part of a group to avoid being discriminated

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left apart.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Example
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

274 words

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SOME PEOPE SAY THAT PEOPLE SHOULD ENCOURAGE THEIR CHILDREN TO TAKE PART IN ORGANISED GROUP ACTIVITIES IN THEIR FREE TIME. OTHERS SAY IT IS IMPORTANT FOR CHILDREN TO LEARN HOW TO OCCUPY THEMSELVES ON THEIR OWN. DICUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION

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In many countries, there is shortage of housing due to growing population. Some people argue that new towns should be built in the country side, others argue for the regeneration of cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of building new towns in the country?

The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?