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Some people today believe that the world's increase in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis.Other people believe that world population is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of world's economy and society. Discuss both views and give your option.

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Few
people
 nowadays believe that the increase in populace is a threat to the
world
 and is likely to cause a global crisis.
While
 others believe that a growing
population
 is essential and it creates the growth of the global economy and society.
However
, I argue that the increasing
population
 will lead to a global crisis. Today the
population
 is increasing and so are the prices of commodities.
People
 are unable to find places to live or construct houses.
People
 are unable to find jobs as the demand for jobs is half the supply for them.
People
 are suffering from hunger all over the
world
 even if technology is advanced.
For instance
, The dead are unable to find a place to bury them in the area where I live, because most parts of
land
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 are occupied by
people
 to make it a residential area. So, in a ,way the increasing
world
population
 will eventually lead to a global crisis.
Whereas
,
on the other hand
,though the
world
's
population
 is causing many issues it
also
 has a positive effect too. The
world
's economy will continue to benefit as there will be more
people
 working. Each individual has different talents and so these
people
 can contribute a lot to society provided that they are given education and a good upbringing.
For example
, if there are more employed
people
 in a country, the country's per capita will rise and in ,addition the economy will grow. To summarise,
although
 the
world
's
population
 increase can be beneficial to the
world
, there are many other contradictions and negative effects
due to
this
 which cannot be ignored. I believe that the global rise in
population
 is causing more harm than good.
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