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Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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Many people think that being a famous person
such
 as a singer and actor not only has a lot of benefits but
also
 problems as consequences of their popularity. Being a
celebrity
 provides not only advantages but
also
 disadvantages. First and foremost, it is well known that
celebrities
 have a lot of chances to earn more money, so they could buy luxury things and access special facilities which are not easy for ordinary people. Taking an example,
celebrities
 having a lot of money make them possible to afford a first-class seat on their flight which offers excellent service and facilities for convenience.
Secondly
, the fame of
celebrities
 could be useful for them to promote good
values
 in society. It is easy for the popular person to create a movement because of their networking skill. We can see an example of a famous American actress namely Angelina Jolie who become a peace ambassador for the United Nations to promote peace
values
 ,especially in conflicted areas
such
 as Africa. She is appointed by the UN because everyone knows her so it will be easier to spread the
values
.
In contrast
, something should be sacrificed for
celebrity
 popularity. It might be true that being a
celebrity
 means that we are ready to be exposed by journalists and paparazzi whenever and wherever we are. It is often found that
celebrities
 have no private life so they feel overwhelmed by social pressure which controls their behaviour. It leads
celebrities
 to suffer psychological problems and drug addiction because they do not know how to deal with the stress. Taking everything into consideration, I do believe that being a
celebrity
 provides more positives than negatives. The positives are the easiness of accessing high-end facilities and networking to promote good
values
 in society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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