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in the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Show advantage and disadvantage

#world #shop #work #people #internet #contact #show #advantage
It is true that since the advent of
technology
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 there are changes in how people communicate and do different errands. There are some for and against
with
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this
 issue as I will discuss in my essay. On one hand, there are various benefits of using the internet.
Firstly
, as
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its
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said
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 you can do your shopping
via
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online whether it is
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for cloths
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cloths
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clothes
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,
furnitures
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furniture
, groceries and hotel accommodations.
This
make
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 life easier and you can save quite a lot of money and time.
Secondly
, working remotely is
also
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beneficial
on
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for
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 some especially the one who have the facilities at home to cater
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set up
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set-up
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.
This
mean
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 they can work
on
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at
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there
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their
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 own pace and comfort. And
lastly
, communication
via
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online is surprisingly quicker, you can send an e-mail
any where
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anywhere
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 in the world and the recipient can receive it in less
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minute.
This
 might be ninety
percent
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 quicker and
efficient
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more efficient
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 than posting it by snail mail.
On the other hand
, the negative effect of
this
 vast use of technology is
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the lost
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lost
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 of
face to face
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face-to-face
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 interaction. If a
person
are
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is
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 used to
look
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looking
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 at his computer all the time and
used
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using
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 it as
hobby
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 at the same time, it can lead to some mental problems.
A depression
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 might be one
of
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the
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example
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examples
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 of
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an illness
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illness
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illnesses
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 that can occur
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 not having a real
person
 to talk to. Not only that it might hinder that
person
 to socialize
to
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with
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 any individual outside the online world which can be devastating to any
person
. In conclusion, I believe that there
various
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 benefits of
advent
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the advent
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 of
internet
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the internet
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 to make each individual life comfortable,
however
,
us
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we
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individual
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individuals
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 should do
out
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our
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 best to have a
balancee
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balanced
balance
 healthy life by trying to initiate
conversation
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a conversation
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to
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with
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 a real
person
 once in a
while
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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