“some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of preschool age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids”. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Childcare
is one of the major concerns of Use synonyms
working class
families. Add a hyphen
working-class
While
some Linking Words
parents
believe that Use synonyms
childcare
nurseries do Use synonyms
better
job in taking Add an article
a better
care
Use synonyms
preschool
Change preposition
of preschool
children
, others argue that Use synonyms
grand
Correct your spelling
grandparents
parents
are the best caregivers for their Use synonyms
children
. In my opinion, Use synonyms
childcare
should be individualized Use synonyms
according to
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the
family structures and financial capacity.
On the one hand, it is advocated that Correct article usage
apply
childcare
Use synonyms
centers
can handle toddlers and young Change the spelling
centres
children
in an effective manner. Use synonyms
Children
can be trained in social skills and can be prepared for school education because these centres Use synonyms
employs
highly trained staff to teach these Change the verb form
employ
children
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, young Linking Words
children
have the opportunity to learn Use synonyms
along with
the same age group Linking Words
children
in these Use synonyms
centers
. Change the spelling
centres
This
will introduce them to an effective socializing Linking Words
skill
at an early age. Fix the agreement mistake
skills
In Addition
to that, admitting Linking Words
children
to nursery schools take away the Use synonyms
aditional
stress Correct your spelling
additional
to
the Change preposition
for
parents
.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, there are many advantages when a child is taken Linking Words
care
Use synonyms
by
Change preposition
of by
grand
Correct your spelling
grandparents
parents
or family members. To explain Use synonyms
further
, grandparents truly love their grandchildren. When they Linking Words
care
for their grandchildren, it will bring up emotional connections between them and makes their bond stronger. It Use synonyms
also
means that Linking Words
children
will learn to value the importance of elders and respect them which is a crucial factor for family relationships.
In my opinion, Use synonyms
childcare
in Use synonyms
this
modern world depends on many factors. Not all Linking Words
the
elderly Correct article usage
apply
grandparent
have the physical strength to take Fix the agreement mistake
grandparents
care
Use synonyms
young
Change preposition
of young
children
. Use synonyms
This
is becauseLinking Words
,
nursing a child can be physically too demanding. Remove the comma
apply
In contrast
, not all Linking Words
the
working Correct article usage
apply
parents
can financially afford Use synonyms
childcare
services. Use synonyms
Therefore
depending on the situation Linking Words
parents
should decide on their Use synonyms
children
's caregivers.
Use synonyms
To conclude
, though there Linking Words
are
varying Change the verb form
is
opinion
about providing Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
care
for Use synonyms
the
preschool Correct article usage
apply
children
in working families, I believe that Use synonyms
childcare
should be individualized Use synonyms
according to
the nature of a family. Linking Words
Nonetheless
, Linking Words
Children
should be taken Use synonyms
care
Use synonyms
with
love and respect so they can become valuable citizens in future.Change preposition
of with
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