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it is better playing games or reading books for children?

It is widely witnessed dual versions about what can bring more benefits for children: if it is playing
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 and watching television or reading books.
While
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, in my opinion,
this
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 digital world brought tremendous positive outcomes, the act of reading a
book
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 is far more beneficial for a
child
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 who is still in their
development
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 stage. In the first instance, from my point of view, children can learn substantially more from a
book
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.
While
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 the written
language
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that is
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 presented in a
book
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 is rather more correct, the
language
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 presented in
games
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 and television is less accurate with the use of frequent slang and swear words.
For example
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, when reading a
book
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 a
child
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 can immerse in a world of learning new words, which can lead to a deeper knowledge of their native
language
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 in terms of lexical resources and grammatical accuracy.
As a result
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, if a
child
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 is not stimulated to read, they could never gain these competencies, which are crucial to later stages in their life. Notwithstanding these advantages of reading a
book
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, playing
games
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 and watching tv can
also
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 have some importance relating to the
development
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 of other cognitive
skills
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. Nowadays,
whereas
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 some
games
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 are all about fighting, many others have the goal to overcome obstacles or even matching words to their synonyms.
Consequently
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, these latter ones aim to develop certain
skills
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, powering these individuals to make decisions, and
therefore
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 enhancing their intelligence.
However
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, these days, many children choose to play and watch violent programs, many times without their parent's supervision.
As a result
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 of
this
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, they could immerse in a world of violence which would not be socially accepted. In summary, in spit of the media era came with enormous benefits, chief among them the
development
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 of children´s cognitive
skills
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, I strongly agree that reading a
book
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 is far more positive as it allows a
child
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 to develop
language
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skills
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 at a very early stage of their
development
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.

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