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Some people think that a life is good for people as it is while others believe that constant change can be too demanding on people. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #life #change
In our
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 days the world evolves really fast it is up to us to be able to adapt
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 the changes,
although
 some people might find it hard. On one hand, it is easier to live a steady life and prefer to be in our own comfort zone, on the other,
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 new experiences could broaden your views and make
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overall
 more open person. In my opinion, everyone should at least try to avoid a rigid routine and give a chance to new activities every once in a
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 can be to alter the status quo for an anxious person, being one myself, in fact doing every day the same things in the same way surely gives you the ability to be more in control of what is happening around you.
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, you do not take any risks by following the same paths that yesterday turned out to be great.
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, if you are able to overcome your fears and take on new challenges you might be able
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 new people or learn something about yourself. Travelling is crucial to broaden your mind and be able to witness how everyone lives in different ways,
for example
, by
studing
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studying
 abroad you can not only learn another language but
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 you can try out new things that do not exist in your country and
also
 taste new food that can
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 cure your homesickness. In
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 I firmly believe that you do not know what is going to change your life, consequentially, if you do not give a try to what you have a possibility to do you will never be able to tell if you did the right thing or you missed out on something special.
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