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The information about the number of men and women working in 6 sectors in Freedonia in 1975 and 1995 is depicted by the graph.

The information about the
number
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 of men and women working in 6
sectors
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 in Freedonia in 1975 and 1995 is depicted by the graph.
Overall
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, the
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 of men workers dominated almost all
sectors
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 within the timeline.
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, at the same time, there was a significant increase in the
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 of women in almost all
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. During the time of period,
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 the
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 of men workers had a slight increase in The Finance or Banking
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, which rose from about 420.000 to 490.000, there was a decline in some
sectors
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, dropping from around 880.000 to 850.000 (Public
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 Non-Defense), 690.000 to 640.000 (Manufacturing), and 240.000 to 200.000 (Public
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 Defense).
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, the Wholesale and Communication remained steady at 700.000 and 300.000 respectively.
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, the
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 of women in
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Wholesale and Communication had an incline, climbing from around 540.000 to 790.000 and 280.000 to 430.000 consecutively, which overtook male’s level after 20 years. Interestingly, the figures for Finance and Public
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 Defense shared
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 similar pattern, with a four-fold rise to almost 480.000 and a three-fold growth to 100.000 each.
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, it can be seen that the Public
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 Non-Defense fell from about 880.000 to 650.000.
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, Manufacturing remained static at 300.000.

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