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Due to an increased global demand on gas and oil undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to acesss more recourses

#demand #gas #oil #areas #world #acesss #recourses
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Due to
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world
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's increased demand for
Gas
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 and
oil
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in
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recent
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,
,
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years
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 it has become necessary to find new suppliers
elsewhere
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 and open new locations.
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 there are several countries that already export
gas
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 and
oil
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 to different parts of the
world
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, supplied resources are not enough to meet the needs of every country.
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, opening new locations will make the
world
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 less dependent on those suppliers.
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, during winter periods,
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the
usege
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usage
use
 of
oil
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 and
gas
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 increases.
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 supply shortages prices go up.If there are many suppliers to choose from prices of
oil
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 and cars will remain low in winter periods as well.
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 discovering new exporters will benefit countries politically.
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,the
world
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 currently heavily depends on Russia as it is a major
gas
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 supplier to many countries Russia's political decisions pressure the political views and decisions of many country leaders .
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 , increased
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 for
gas
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 and
oil
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 in recent years
,
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made
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 it necessary to look for new locations. In my ,opinion as the
world
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 constantly grows, in future years the trade
on
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in
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oil
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 and
gas
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 is expected to grow even more.
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